Is marriage a lifelong burden or endless happiness?
Marriage is a social union or legal contract between people that creates kinship. Such thought many people before marriage! But marriage - is a very important period of live of every person in our big world. It is big pleasure when you wake up and hear breath of your lovely person! But not all understand this!
Sometimes women almost worry about every little thing in their life cycle. I would say 90% of the women who are above 28 years old will somehow want to marry cause they feel time is running out.
Some woman make own life and career and then they want to be a wife-it is not right….because in this case it was a lifelong burden!
As to my mind, marriages are made in heaven and celebrated on earth. As for me, it is something great in life, new way in life…
This essay is not logically structured. Please add some arguments or facts to support your opinion.
ОтветитьУдалитьMake the "red line" between the exposition and the body. The exposition is to fuzzy! And please add in the exposition the main question of the essay.
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Grammatical mistakes:
-"think"instead of "thought"
-"before they get marry" instead of "marriage"
"...28 years old WOULD..." instead of "...28 years old will..."
-"Sometimes almost ALL women worry..." instead of "Sometimes women almost worry"
-"I would say THAT 90%" instead of "I would say 90%"
-"Some womEn make THEIR own life..." instead of "Some woman make own life"
-"And if you ask me “Is marriage a lifelong burden or endless happiness?” I would say it's really endless happiness..." instead of "And if you ask me “Is marriage a lifelong burden or endless happiness?”-really endless happiness..."
-"Marriage brings people happy feelings." instead of "Marriage brings to people happy feelings."
To my mind, this essay doesn't cover all the points and this essay doesn't have defined structure. I can define there a kind of introduction, a kind of main part and "something" lie conclusion. The theme is not developed. I think, this essay should be rewritten.
ОтветитьУдалитьThere are some mistakes, jenya had already mentioned.
Version #2. (Corrected)
Marriage is a social union or legal contract between people that creates kinship. Many people think like that before they get marry! But marriage is a very important period in life of every person in our big world. It is a great pleasure when you wake up and hear breath of your beloved man! But not all can understand this!
Sometimes women worry about every trifle in their life cycle. I would say that 90 per cent of the women who are above 28 years old would somehow want to marry because they feel that time is running.
Some women arrange well their life and career and then they want to be just a wife. It is not right. Because in this case it can be a lifelong burden!
To my mind, marriages are made in heaven and celebrated on earth. It is something great in our life, new way in our life…
And if you ask me “Is marriage a lifelong burden or endless happiness?”- I will answer you: “Marriage is really endless happiness, because I believe only in good things and all bad things are not for me.”
Marriage brings to people happy feelings.
Marriage is only endless happiness!
Marriage is a social union or legal contract between people that creates kinship. Such thought many people before marry! But marriage - is a very important period of live of every person in our big world. It is big pleasure when you wake up and hear breath of your lovely person! But not all understand this!
ОтветитьУдалитьSometimes almost all women worry about every little thing in their life cycle. I would say that 90% of the women who are above 28 years old would somehow want to marry cause they feel time is running out.
Some women make their own life and career and then they want to be a wife-it is not right….because in this case it was a lifelong burden!
As to my mind, marriages are made in heaven and celebrated on earth. As for me, it is something great in life, new way in life…
And if you ask me “Is marriage a lifelong burden or endless happiness?” I would say really endless happiness, because I believe only in good things and all bad are not for me…
Marriage brings people happy feelings.
Marriage is only endless happiness!
Thanks for your remarks.
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